correct it !!!!20 mark

1.I was shocked by this article about child abuse.
(correct)

2.In my opinion, our society does not enough police to protect our children.
(Since you used the word "policies", I wonder if you meant by the law to protect children ?! If so, please change the sentence accordingly.)

3.In order to solve this problem, I agree with the government that we should set up a register of (sex) offenders.

4. & 5. Although we should not discriminate them as everyone should have chance to redeem one's mistakes, we merely want to protect our precious children.

6.Moreover their behavior should be condemned and they reflect badly on our society.

7.Nonetheless I still believe we should actively help them.

8. Pedophilia is a disease so patients with this problem can be helped by social workers and doctors.

1. I was shocked by this article about children abuse. (i dont know if it is correct or not.)

2. In my opinio, our socirty does not have enough police to protect children.

3. I order to solve this problem, I agree government set up register of name of offender.

4. We should not discriminate them since everyone should have chance to correct their errors.

5. We only want to protect our precious children.

6. Moreover, their behaviors should be condemned and it will reflect badly on our society.

7. I still believe that we should help them actively.

8. Since pedophilia is a kind of disease, so I think they may need social workers or doctors.

I hope that I can help you.
(Some answer may wrong.)