correct it!! 20mark!one to one correct~

I understand you want us to correct your writing sentence by sentence, but unfortunately this is not the right approach, instead I will try to correct it as a whole paragraph, and you can decide if that make sense. Simplicity is key. Hope this helps.


*I think parents are overprotecting their children nowadays, they always look after their kids and satisfy their needs at their best. Parents always think that by looking after their children, meaning that they love their children very much, unfortunately it is not not the case, it is obstructing their development. For example, kids growing up in this kind of environment may become selfish and do not care about other peoples' feelings, therefore parents need to learn not to be overprotecting.

Although my parents are annoying sometimes, I still love them very much. I know that they always work hard for us, so I respect them very much. I always help them to do housework, and to study hard, just to show my appreciation.

1.Nowadays, parents are over protective to their children.

2.They always look after them and satisfy their needs or wants.

3.They think that these behaviors show that they love their children very much.

4.But it is unhealthy for child development.

5.They may become selfish persons and do not care about others' feelings.

6.But sometimes they need to learn so as not to overprotect them.

7.Although my parents are troublesome, I love my parents very much.

8.I know that they always work very hard for our lives.

9.So I must respect them always.

10.For example,helping them to do housework,trying our best to study and so on.

11.They will be feeling happy!