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1.I am so happy today because my brother gives me a big surprise.
a big surprise: 一個驚訝

2.He suddenly helps me to do housework.
no mistakes.

3.Actually he is a fat and a lazy boy.
adjectives分為不同種類, 擺放次序有規定: 1.形狀 2 顏色 3.性質

4.He never helps us to do housework.
no mistakes.
5.Because he is young, so our family also never blames and forces him.
family:　可以是單數或複數；如：My family is big. My family are always arguing among themselves.
6.Today his behavior is quite abnormal.
behavior: 舉動或行為

7.Finally, he told us that he wants to be a responsible person and he can share our responsibility in family.
應用told, 因他已說了出來.


8.My family is so touchable and gratifying, he grows up eventually.
這兒的family 應是單數,要用is

9.Besides, I decided to reward for his effort, so I would like to give his favorite ice cream to him.
reward for: 為報酬......; give .....to him

10.Time never stops to wait anyone, but everyone can use time properly.
time: 時間,不用加 s

11.My brother is very clever since he knows that Time and tide wait for no men.
no後面要用眾數，如　no brothers, no pens, no apples...
12.So he will do different things at anytime.
anytime: 不是分開的


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2008-03-16 01:36:25 補充：
5.Because he is a young boy 或 he is young

Today, I am so happy because my brother gives me a big surprise. Unexpectedly, he helped me to do housework. In fact, he is fat and lazy, and he never helps us to do any housework before. Since he is the youngest, our family never suggests or requests him to do chores. What he did today is quite amazing. Finally, he told us that he wants to be a responsible person and he can share our family responsibility too. My family is gratified and thankful for his growing up action. In order to reward him in his efforts to become a responsible person, I decided to praise him with his favorite ice cream. Time stops for no one, but if you know how to use it wisely, it will be of much use to you. My brother has realized this important fact, and I am very proud of him. Now he will do certain things according to his own personal agenda, and I am happy that he has become so organized.