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It is because instead of only emphasizing students’ academic achievements, this school also provides different kinds of extra-curricular activities which have shown significant results. It will definitely help me develop every aspect of myself.

因為這所學校除了着重學業成績外.仲開設多個課外活動.並有一定成就.這樣有助我全面發展

Because of this school in addition toThe outside of the heavy academic record.The Zhong sets up several extracurricular activities.Also there is certain achievement.Have already helped me to develop completely like this.

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Aside from emphasising students' academic achievements, the school organizes a number of sucessful extra-curriculum activities. It is helpful for my overall development.

因為這所學校除了着重學業成績外.仲開設多個課外活動.並有一定成就.這樣有助我全面發展
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Because this school besides emphatically academic achievement, but also opens many extracurricular activities, and has certain achievement, like this is helpful my full scale development.

This school emphasises not only in academic achievement, but also provides many extra-curicular activities; and it succeeds. This helps me to develop myself in all areas.