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It may take a long time for Edison Chen Koon-Hei to win forgiveness from the females stars depicted naked and having sex with him in hundreds of picture leaked on the internet.
During the past few weeks, he have been with his mother and his family and his loved ones to show support and care and at the same time to have them support and care for Edison . In 21/2,he have come back to Hong Kong to stand before and count for himself. He have never escaped from his responsibility.
He admit that most of the photos being circulated on the Internet were taken by him . But these photos are very private and have not been shown to people and are never intended to be shown to anyone. These photos were stolen from him illegally and distributed without himself consent.
He know young people in Hong Kong look up to many figures in our society. Edison wish this matter will teach everyone a lesson. To all the young people in our community, let this be a lesson for you all.
Edison decide to step away from the Hong Kong entertainment industry. He decided to do this to give myself an opportunity, to heal himself, and to search his soul. He will dedicate his time to charity and community work within the next few months. He will be away from Hong Kong entertainment indefinitely, there is no time frame.
Chan would like to also apologize once again to all the ladies and their families, my family and to everyone in Hong Kong and everyone in our society. He apologize to everyone (who) has to go through this.
he have done is yet,and he is wish have our forgiveness.i think we should accept his apology and give him a chace,because he have a big punishment.