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Lastly, my analysis will focus on making a suggestion for improvement in marketing of Rolex brand watches. Nowadays, Rolex (please write its name of company) has no franchised shops in Hong Kong but only authorizes some agents to sell their products(but only assigns some watch shops as agents for sale of their products). It is not necessarily adequate although these agents not having brand name are located at the most busy districts like Causeway Bay and Mong Kok .

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Lastly, my analysis will foucus on one of the suggestion in Rolex's watches.Nowadays , Rolex’s watches do not have any special shop(專門店) in Hong Kong. There's only business agents to hold the proxy. Although these business agents located in Cause Way Bay or Mong Kok etc those busy place, it's still not enough. Because these business agents do not have a famous brand name.

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Lastly, my analysis will focus on one of the suggestion in Rolex’s watches. <-- lee句其實你想講咩? 大致上好似冇咩問題...但係用詞同埋preposition 有d d 問題...

Lastly, my analysis will focus on one of the band name suggestions, Rolex. Nowadays , Rolex does not have any specialized shop in Hong Kong. The Management of Rolex only gives out the proxy to some agents. Although these agents shop are located at the most busting place such as Causeway Bay, Mong Kok, etc, they are not enough to popularize (because) they do not have their own famous brand name.

because 用於 Clause
because of 用於 Noun / Noun Phrase

Pour finir, mon analyse se concentrera sur une de la suggestion dans
des montres de Rolex. De nos jours, les montres de Rolex n'a aucun
shop(spécial dans Hong Kong, ayez seulement un certain
agents(d'affaires ayez la procuration. Bien que ces agents
d'affaires commerciaux situés à l'endroit éclatant de compartiment
ou de Mong Kok etc.. de manière de cause, il ne soit pas assez. En
raison du démuni de ces agents d'affaires commerciaux le nom de
marque célèbre

Lastly, my analysis will focus on one of the suggestion(s) in Rolex’s watches. Nowadays , Rolex’s watches does not have any special(用expert可能會比較好) shop(專門店) in Hong Kong, only have some (可以唔洗business) agents(代理商) have proxy. Although these (business) agents (is) located at Cause Way Bay or Mong Kok etc busting(busy?) place, it is not enough. Because of these (business) agents (don't)have (got) or earn the famous brand name.