英文的自我介紹.. 請幫我對一下文法..

My name is Regina Fong. I'm fourteen years old. I live in xxxxx. I live with my mother and father. ( do not say "consist" because it's too formal and you can just miss that you have no brother and sister because if you say you live with your mother and father, people know that you have no other sisters or brother.) I study in xxxxx and I am a Form X student. I have lots of hobbies. Among them, I like playing piano the most because I love music. I also like to play badmintion. It's really an exciting exercise.

My name is Regina Fong xxx xxx. I'm fourteen years old. I live in xxxxxx. I have three family members in my family and they are my father,my mother and I.My father is a/an xxxxxxx(職業)and my mother is a/an xxxxxxxxxx(職業). I study in xxxxx and I’m a secondary/form xxxxx(中學what年級) student. I have a l lot of hobbies,such as xxxx,xxxx,andxxxxx. I like playing piano the most because I love music. I also like to play badminton too beacuse I think it’s an exciting exercise.If I can study in your school,I would be very glad and I will do my best in your school.

2008-02-15 14:20:41 補充：
My name is Regina Fong xxx xxx.

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My name is Regina Fong.
I'm fourteen years old.
I live in xxxxxx with my family.
There are 3 members in my family ---(No brothers or sisters 果D人地見到你係一家3口都應該知)
I study in xxxxx. (係人都知你係個學生)
I have a lot of hobbies.
I love music and I love playing piano very much.
I also like playing badminton.
It’s an exciting exercise.
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