找人幫忙改小學英文作文[20分]

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"Oh no! My cake has been eaten by the cartoon character!" I screamed out with fear.
On Sunday, I stayed at home and watched my favourite TV programmes as my parents would be out until night. I felt very happy about that.
At noon, I felt very hungry and took a piece of cake from the kitchen as my lunch. The programme now showing is "Super Rabbit", which was one of my favourite. The volume of the TV became louder and louder. I didn't know what was happening. Suddenly, the television was broken and a cartoon character jumped out of it onto my knees. I was scared and I couldn't believe that this was real.
" I am ' Super Rabbit ' ! I want your cake! " yelled Super Rabbit.Afterwards, I gave my cake to it because I was afraid that the rabbit woiuld hurt me.
Right after the rabbit has eaten my cake, it has grown like a giant. I didn't know anything to do. If that rabbit hit me, I would die. So I wanted to go out and search for help but the door was locked.
" If you still want to live, you must bring me more food! " shouted Super Rabbit.I quickly ran to the kitchen and wanted to find some food for it but there was not any. At the same time, my parents came back. I was glad that at last, there was someone who could help me. Unfortunately, the rabbit became small and ran back to the television just before my parents step into the house.
My mother was angry and asked me about why was the television broken and although I told her what has happened, she didn't believe me.


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P.S. 有D quotation mark 前後特登空左一格係因為編碼有小小問題，記得要改一改

Oh No!My cake was eatten by a cartoon character!’screamed by me

A holiday, of SundayI stayed at home and watched TV programmes which is my favourite.My parent was going out so I could watch my favourite TV programmes until at night.I felt very happy about that.

Until 12pm,I felt very hungry so i took a cake for lunch.When i was eating the cake,the TV was showing a cartoon called ‘Super Rabbit’.It is also my favourite.When the TV was showing the cartoon,the sound of the TV became very loud.I didn,t know what happened.Suddenly,the TV was broken and a cartoon character jumped onto my knee from the TV.I felt very scared.I couldn’t belive that it was a real life.‘I am Super Rabbit!I want to eat your cake!’yelled the cartoon rabbit.Afterward,I gave my cake to the rabbit because i was worried that the rabbit would hurt me.

After the rabbit ate the cake,it became very big even taller than me.I didn’t know how to do.If the rabbit beat me,i would die.Therefore,i wanted to got out and find some people to help me but the door was locked.‘If you don’t want to die,go and get more food for me!’shouted the rabbit.‘OK!OK!’replied me as i felt scared.Afterthat,i went to the kitchen and found some food for the rabbit but i couldn’t belived that the kitchen had no food.At the same time,my parents came back and i felt very happy since i could get help from my parents.When my parents opened the door,the rabbit became small and went back into the TV.

When my mother asked me why the TV was break,i explained to her because of the cartoon rabbit.But my mother never belive me......

‘Oh No!My cakes were eatten by a cartoon character!’screamed me in panic.

In a Sunday's holiday,I stayed at home and watched TV programmes which are my favourites.My parents were going out so i could watch my favourite TV programmes until night.I felt very happy about that.

Until 12pm,I felt very hungry so i took a cake for lunch.When i was eating the cake,the TV was showing a cartoon called ‘Super Rabbit’.It is also my favourite.When the TV was showing the cartoon,the sound of the TV became very loud.I didn,t know what happened.Suddenly,the TV was broken and a cartoon character jumped onto my knee from the TV.I felt very scared.I couldn’t belive that it was a real life.‘I am Super Rabbit!I want to eat your cake!’yelled the cartoon rabbit.Afterward,I gave my cakes to the rabbit because i was worried that the rabbit would hurt me.

After the rabbit had eaten the cake,it became very tall and even taller than me.I didn’t know what to do.If the rabbit beats on me,i would die.Therefore,i wanted to got out and found some people to help me but the door was locked.‘If you don’t want to die,go and get much food for me!’shouted the rabbit.‘OK!OK!’replied me as i felt scared.Afterthat,i went to the kitchens and found some food for the rabbit but i couldn’t belived that the kitchens had no food.At the same time,my parents came back and i felt very happy since i could get help from my parents.When my parents opened the door,the rabbit became small and went back into the TV.

When my mother asked me why the TV was broken,i explained to her because of the cartoon rabbit.But my mother never believed me......

Oh No!My cakes were eaten by a cartoon character!

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