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[Every time] [I] watch the Phantom of the Opera(,) I [always] cry [over] the ending. No one [could] commiserate [with] Phantom. His mother (left him because of his [horrible] face.] All the people called him [不用was] the son of evil. Christine [didn't love him anymore, also because of his face]. It [makes the audience feel great sorrow.]
The [costumes] and stage design were beautiful and amazing.
The sound effects and songs of this movie [are] very great too!

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正常如下:
Every time I watch the Phantom of the Opera, I always cry over the ending. No one could commiserate with Phantom. His mother left him because of his horrible face. Al the people called him the son of evil. Christine didn't love him anymore, also because of his face. It makes the audience feel great sorrow.
The costumes and stage design were beautiful and amazing.
The sound effects and songs of this movie are very great too!

Everytime I watched the Phantom of the Opera, I would cry for the ending. No one commiserated with Phantom whose mother left him because of his horrible face. People all called him the Son of Evil. Christine did not love him too because of his face. It really made audiences feel sorrowful. The costume and stage designs were beautiful and amazing. The sound effects and the songs of this movie are very great too!

everytime i watch the Phantom of the Opera I cry at the ending. No one showed commiseration to Phantom . His mother left him because of his horrible face, all the people called him son of the evil. Even Christine did not love him anymore because of his face. It really makes the audience feel sorrow.
The clothing and stage design were beautiful and amazing.
The sound effects and songs in this movie were also very great!