急!!!求英文[10點]小6功課!

Last Summer Holiday,I and teacher by coach go to elderly home visit aged people.
We showed magic tricks and sing with them.We also give gloves,hats and fruit with them.I feel very happy and interesting.Hope I can go t next time.

請注意會文應用past tense. Also, I and teacher 的排序有問題, should be " teacher & I"...."I"是排最後.

Last year summer vacation morning, I rode in a（coach呢個係指“教練”噃！你喺度填番個交通工具名啦） with teacher to elderly home visited the old people.We have performed the magic and sing together with them.We have also delivered gloves, hats and fruit give them.I feel very happy and has the interest.I hope next time again will go.

One morning in last summer, my teacher and I went to visit the home of the elderly by coach. We have performed some magic tricks to them and sang with them. We have even gave them gloves, hats and fruits as presents. I think this was really an excellent experience. I hope that I could go and visit them next time.

幫你改左少少…我個人認為咁樣比較好
不過summer送手套好似怪怪地咁=P

2008-01-24 00:24:04 補充：
最尾個句應該係：I hope I could visit them AGAIN next time.

Last summer morning,I went to visit the aged people who lived in elderly home. I went there by coach with my teacher. We played a magic show and sang with them. Also we gave some present such as gloves, hats and fruit to them. I felt very happy and interesting. I hope i can go there again to join this meaningful activities!

但係我想問你點解夏天會送手套同帽？

Summer vacation early morning, I will last year search aged people. with teacher while coach to elderly home we to perform magic tricks and sing with them. we also to deliver gloves, hats and fruit with them.l feel very happy and the interesting. hope next time again to go!

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