please teach me the grammer,thanks

2008-01-21 6:42 pm
Dear XXX

How are you?Hope everything goes well with you.

I would like to inform you that we will have Chinese new year holiday from 1-18.Feb.

From 7-12,Feb,i will attend Frankfurt fair,for any queries,pls contact with me by email.Looking forward to seeing you at frankfurt fari,we have many new designs for our new product Bone china.

Any queries,pls kindly let me know.

best regrads
xxx

回答 (2)

2008-01-22 1:16 am
✔ 最佳答案
Please refer to below for my suggestion:

Para 1: OK!!

Para 2:
I would like to inform you (or simply: Please note) that we will be out of office during the Chinese New Year holiday from Feb 1 to Feb 18.

Para 3:
I will be attending Frankfurt Fair on Feb 7 till Feb 12. For any queries, please contact me via email. Hope to see you at Frankfurt Fair by then as we will have many of our new designs regarding our new product Bone China showing in the Fair. Guess you may be interested.

Para 4:
For further queries, kindly please let me know.

Best Regards,
xxx
參考: personal opinion
2008-01-21 7:24 pm
Please kindly see the below advice for your rreference.

As this email seems to be an business email.
(1) It is good to use full form instead of abbreviations. It is more formal that using please to repleace plz.

(2)For the place or country, please use the capital letter in the starting, that means Frankfurt , not frankfurt. Similarily, using Bone China to replace with Bone china.

(3) We mention a certain period (e.g. 7-12, Feb) , feb, we should use during not from 7-12, Feb.

(4) Best Regards would be better used.


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