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The effects of obesity of teenagers in Hong Kong is becoming bad, such as heart problem, not want to walk for a short distance and becoming lazier, parents should look after their children’s health.
Heart problem, some teenagers are getting very fat from eating junk food and not doing enough exercises, some parents just gave them many junk foods to eat, other parents give their children money to buy what they want to eat. Some teenagers are already having a heart problem at thirteen or fourteen years old, which require diet advice from doctors, in order to get to a normal size again.
Some teenagers will get tired by walking a few steps, others will go to school by bus even for getting off at the next stop, which is a very short distance that they could have walk, instead of taking a bus.
Those obese teenagers will always stay at home and play video or online games that do not need them to move a lot, most of them will not play sport, since they will easily get tired again, they will always walk slowly and sit down when they can. In some cases, they are becoming very fat, they will not do things that they normally will do if they can move faster, such as go out for shopping.
In conclusion, the effects of obesity of teenagers in Hong Kong is becoming bad, that parents should be more careful to look after their children, in order to keep them healthy. 252 words

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The previous entrée was decent, however I believe IT LACKS A VERY IMPORTANT ELEMENT within, which is the impact of this on the government health budget and the affect of future generations with regards to the demographics of Hong Kong.

The effects of obesity among teenagers in Hong Kong [262 Words]

Reports have it that the obesity amongst teenagers in developed cities are becoming a major concern, nonetheless Hong Kong suffers as victim due to the increased availability of what is termed ‘ convenient foods ‘ . This is partly due to the fact that Hong Kong is a fast paced society, teenagers in this generation are adapting to this culture, and the average dining time in Hong Kong is of world record fast! The two supplement each other thus contributing to a huge problem of obesity amongst local teenagers.

Obese teenagers suffer from many heart related problems, cholesterol problems and diabetes. Encountering these illnesses at such an early state impedes healthy growth and most of all has huge adverse impacts on their career development and social life. Research shows that obesity can be inherited and has an impact on overall fertility rate as well. For a healthy growth of our population, schools, family and the government should increase awareness of problems from teenage obesity and alleviate this issue before it becomes too late.

Other than that, the medical liabilities will only increase as more people are victims of related diseases. Not only will this be a burden on the teenagers in the future, but a problem for the government’s medical budget and resources.

With all being said, teenage obesity has social and economical costs that are obvious and deadly. Through different approaches such as mass media, education and awareness, we must deal with this issue and avert the risks of it at all costs before it becomes a cyclical irresolvable problem.