Last Sunday, I went to the park with my family. I saw a man ran very fast and he
was taking a full bag. All of sudden, his bag fell out something .
It was money!
Then, I thought it had a bank in this street. And we went on. Oh! It had a robbery in here.
A robber stole very much money away. I saw some police.
I told them what I knew.
At last, the police caught the robber. The banker also thanked me very much.
I will be more care what I see in the road and help the police.
Please help me to correct my writting and give marks for me
2007-11-30 7:28 am
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2007-11-30 7:33 pm
✔ 最佳答案
I went to the park with my family last Sunday. I saw a man RUNNING SO FAST with LOADED bags in his hands. All of a sudden, something fell out of his bag. It was money!
I KNEW there WAS a bank in the street. AS we went on WE FOUND OUT THAT THE BANK GOT ROBBED AND THE robber stole A LOT OF money. I WENT UP TO THE police AND told them what I SAW.
At last, the police caught the robber. The banker also thanked me.
IN THE FUTURE, I will KEEP AN EYE ON THE ROAD and LEND A HAND TO the police WHEN NEEDED.
2007-12-08 8:18 pm
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