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Today is Monday ,so I can cheak the Eng exam at the class. My eng teacher, Mr Lee said ours eng.
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Today is Monday, so I can check the English exam marks at class.
Mr. Lee, my English teacher told us the marks.
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Today is Monday, therefore I can check the English exam marks at class.
Mr. Lee, my English teacher announced the marks.
so与therefore是一样的。但是， so 比较普通。
你是指可以查看英文考卷的分数，对吧?
所以要放“mark"分数， 而不是查看“英文考卷“，因这是老师的责任。
announce是宣布。announced是过去式。因为他已经告诉你们了@宣布了你们的成绩。
第一句可以用present tense现在式，因为当天宣布后（还在当天，可能你早上知道后，晚上就写着作文了。而你的意思是这样吧？），你写了那篇像日记般的文章。(today就是今天，现在发生的事。）
若你要用past tense, 可以说:
Mr. Lee, my English teacher announced our exam marks on Monday.(接下去）...这就是你不在宣布成绩的当天--不在星期一写这个文章，而是隔天才写的）
还有， 其实你若要放你英文老师的名，就要先放名字，这是一种尊重，重点在Mr. Lee，而不是某某/隔壁班的英文老师, 是Mr.Lee，我们的英文老师宣布的。但是，你的方式是对的，你也可以早你的方式写。
Exam paper one was very poor. NO ONE CAN PASS!
I thought it was exitied. It is because at the last exam have just had three people could pass.
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The mark of the first paper was low.
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We were poor at English.
No one could pass the first paper@ No one could pass the exam.
I was excited@ I thought it was exciting. It was because there were three students could pass the last exam.
比较适合用过去式， 因为你陈述着已经过去了的事。
poor是差，但是不能说考卷差，而是我们考得差。我们只可以说，我们第一份的考卷分数低。
excited是兴奋。你的意思是否兴奋？（没有"exitied"这个字的）
I was excited.形容我兴奋。
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It was exciting.形容那件事令我感到兴奋。
形容事物就用exciting.如： The game is exciting.那个游戏令人兴奋。
It was because there were three students could pass the last exam.
那是因为有三位学生可以通过上一次的考试。
But at this time, no one could pass, nobody could said anything. Mr Lee said don't be sad, it alsohad the paper two----writing part, it helped us very much. It also had two pass. It wasn't
me, I'm the third.fifty-seven marks,I'm falled.
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However, no one could pass the exam this time. We were silent.
Mr. Lee advised us not to be sad. She told us there were two students passed the second paper, writing test. Unfortunately, I was not one of them.
I got the third highest mark, fifty seven although I failed.
但是，没有一个人可以通过这次的考试。
我们都静了@没有出声。
李老师劝告我们不要伤心。
（told是过去式的tell--告诉)
他告诉我们还有两位学生通过第二个考试，写作试。
很不幸的，我不是其中之一。
我得到第三高分--57分，虽然我不及格。
Mr Lee said don't be sad,it also had the paper two----writing part, it helped us very much. It also had two pass.
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Mr.Lee told us not to be sad because there was the second paper, writing part. That paper helped us in gaining marks. There were 2 students passed the paper.
李老师教我们不用伤心，因为还有第二个考试，写作试。
那个考试会帮助我们拿分的。有两位学生通过那个考试。
***你有任何问题@我解释得不清楚，可以再问。
谢谢。
2007-11-28 14:02:34 補充：
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