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yesterday was my birthday , I loved that day very much.
Yesterday was my birthday , I *enjoyed it very much.
That day,my family made a birthday party for me in the MAC
That day,my family *held a birthday party for me in the MAC
with my best classmates they are Boby,John,Alan,etc.
with my best *friends, they *were Boby, John, Alan,etc.
(friends好d; 多gwor一個要用were; 開始用左past tense後面都要)
At that time,we first play some games,it was very extiting!
At *the party, we first played some games, *they were very *exciting!
(多gwor一個game)
After played,mon bought a lot of gift for us ,we loved it.
After *playing, *Mom bought a lot of *gifts for us, we loved *them very much.
(多gwor一分禮物)
We took the gift and played he game so we felt tried.
We took the *gifts and played *the games so we felt tried.
(多gwor一分禮物)
We had not enough energy to play any things,
We *do not have enough energy to play *games any more,
so we ate the pan cake, hamburger etc.
so we ate *pancakes, hamburgers etc.
(冇指定一舊pancake/hamburger, 唔洗the)
At thtat day, I think it is the best birthday in my life.
*I thought that day was the best birthday in my life.
2007-11-28 17:53:23 補充:
80/100分