英文作文!!

這個星期五是重陽節,,
清早,,
我和爸爸媽媽一起去拜祭先人...
我是第一次跟爸爸媽媽去拜祭先人的,,
我們一早買好祭品,,就出發,,
我一下車,,,
就看見這兒已經人山人海...
我發現中國人真有孝心呢!!
我和爸爸媽媽拜祭過先人之後,,
就回家去了!!

This Friday morning was Double Ninth Festival.
In the morning, my father and mother brought me to pay respects to our ancestors.It was my first time !
We bought some sacrificial offerings before we set off.
When I got off the bus,I saw many people as big as hill and sea so I knew that chinese are filial !
After we paid respect to our ancestors, we got home.

我覺得你應該加點個人感受,例如很開心happy,很累tired...這樣會更好.例如:
雖然我很累,但是我真的很開心.
Although I was tired, I was so happy.

It's the first time I went to pay respects to our ancestors with my father and mother on Firday morning.We bought offerings early and then we set off.When I got off the bus,I saw a sea of people.I found that the Chinses are very filial ! After we paid respects to our ancestors,we home.