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Firstly, we hope you can spare some time to our company to give a brief introduction on the life insurance scheme because our employees do not understand it very well. Secondly, please review if you can bundle the scheme with some benefits or premium discount, e.g. purchase of life insurance for a year will get a month's premium free, some coupons or small gifts. Thirdly, please provide some statistical data and real-life examples on life insurance. The above ways should also be able to make the scheme more attractive to our employees.

請幫忙改文法～

Firstly, hope you can take time to our companies to carry on a brief introduction concerning about the life insurance scheme, because our employees are not be understand very much. Secondly, if you can match with some benefits or premium, such as buy a life insurance for a year, which can get a month free, some coupon, or present some small gifts. Thirdly, Some piece with single publicity, or some data of life insurance. These also should be able to attract with our employees.
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First, we hope you can spend some time to our company to carry on a brief introduction which is concerning about the life insurance scheme, because our employees are not understand so much. Second, if you can match with some benefits or premium, such as buy a life insurance for a year, you can get free for one month, some coupons, or some small gifts. Third, some pieces with single publicity or some datas of life insurance, should able to attract with our employees.