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2007-09-24 7:33 am
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Hi! I’m bunny Shita. I am a fat rabbit, look like a ball. I’m very quiet in the class, some classmate think that me is mute. I’m poor results for my study. And I don’t like sport, sometimes my classmate hope me can play ball games with them and that can help me to keep fit. In my class have one pretty girl, cat sally also have many fans to serve with her, and she is beautiful, slim and clever in the class.
更新1:

Sally is a disagreeable girl, not any girl friend like her. I don’t like her too, she also use the bad word to describe me. She likes to call me fat pig or dull pig. Not only on me, has she asked something bad word with other girl too.

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But she is very well on her accomplishments, some classmate want to get good marks and they would try to be a friend. I share this incident with my mother. My mother told me, Sally just to show off her. Sally knows that she is beautiful and clever, she hope everyone can to pay attention to her.

更新3:

Sally using a wrong way, yes may be boys would like her beauty, but many girls would dislike her behavior. And my mother hope me can actively to make friends, every one should need friends for help in our life.

回答 (1)

2007-09-24 7:42 am
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Hi! I’m bunny *****a. I am a fat rabbit,(AND) look like a ball. I’m very quiet in the class(LESSON), some classmate(S) think that me(I) is(AM) mute. I’m(HAVE) poor results for(IN) my study. And(BUT) I don’t like sport, sometimes my classmate(S) hope me can(TO) play ball games with them and that can(^ALSO) help me to keep fit. In my class(^,) have(THERE IS) one pretty girl, cat sally(SALLY THE CAT) also have many fans to serve with(DELETE "WITH") her, and she is beautiful, slim and clever in the(OUR/THEIR) class.
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