我今早出了封電郵通知客戶公司將同事的客戶交由我交進，我用英文寫，其中開頭一句是
I would like to take this opportunity to inform you that I have been assigned to serve your company in the immediate future.
但同事指責用 "to inform you"是不適當，不禮貌，是否這麼嚴重呢？以下是句子是同事給我的一句
Also, “to inform you…” is a kind of improper tone for the customer, try to have a more polite why to express yourself.
請高手指教。
“to inform you…” is a kind of improper tone for the customer
2007-09-23 12:27 am
回答 (3)
2007-09-23 11:17 am
✔ 最佳答案
"Inform you" is like saying "I'm telling you".Maybe using a kinder word would be slightly better for writting to Customers.
2008-04-24 8:04 pm
This sentence is made redundant by putting "Please" and "kindly" together.
2008-04-24 12:12:22 補充：
Try to avoid writing passive voice in business letters or e-mails as possible.
My suggestion: "Please note that I will be serving your company in the coming future, as... (your reason)."
寫作大忌︰文章累贅冗長容易出錯。
表達方式一針見血並不等於沒有禮貌，只要適當地使用敬語便可。
文章簡潔﹑易懂，別人閱讀起來也比較舒服。
2008-04-24 12:12:22 補充：
Try to avoid writing passive voice in business letters or e-mails as possible.
My suggestion: "Please note that I will be serving your company in the coming future, as... (your reason)."
寫作大忌︰文章累贅冗長容易出錯。
表達方式一針見血並不等於沒有禮貌，只要適當地使用敬語便可。
文章簡潔﹑易懂，別人閱讀起來也比較舒服。
2007-09-23 5:26 pm
Please kindly be informed that I will be serving your company in the immediate future. - 這樣, 語氣就溫和得多.
參考: Myself
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