Englishletter改文法Part1(Expertplease)

你下次問一封信一次過問啦﹐任何書信都係一個正体﹐分開問好難完整架﹗

Dear Manager,

My family and I have visited your restaurant on Monday, 12 September 2007. We had a great time dining in your restaurant. However, after we left and went home, we found that my younger sister's NDS was lost.

We might have left the NDS in your restaurant. Please check if you have found a white GameBoy in a grey case, with 3 pokemon, 1 Harry Potter and 1 Transformer disks in the case.

If you found them, please contact me at 90731761. Your help is deeply appreciated.

Thank you very much for your time and attention. I apologize for any inconvenience caused.

your faithfully,
Lily

1。你去得幫趁就梗係customer啦﹐唔洗第一句再提咁‘娘’
2。書信最緊要簡潔流暢﹐尤其你依家要問人幫你check野﹐唔好寫咁長咁'chum',你可以想像睇信的人唔會嘥太多時間去睇

I am a customer....... My family and I have"visited" your restaurant on Monday, 12th September 2007. We have had a great time in your restaurant. Unfortunately, we found that my younger sister has lost her NDS(Gameboy) after we had gone back home.

2007-09-12 17:31:41 補充：
no any quotaion marks in the word "visited". ^x^