英文大師請來改文(2)、、、

Changed version:
In fact,I believed that the relationship between applicant and his spouse is genuine and continuing.Following are the reasons why I believed that.Firstly,from the calls I knew that they have been maintaining their relationship for such a long time.Secondly,although they had got the migration visas successfully,they gave it up as the applicant was required to take care his old father who is now 96 years old.

I have changed few things for you.
First,of course--->in fact~as I think the expression is not so suitable
Second,relationship of---->relationship with~between two persons
Third,There are some reasons---->Following are the reasons why I believed that~long sentence and much more detail
Forth,a very long time------>such a long time

if you have any questions about the answer,just ask me directly~thanks
Hope this can help you to slolve the problem^^

2007-08-30 13:31:31 補充：
Second,relationship of---->relationship with~between two persons<----wrongCORRECT:Second,relationship of---->relationship between~between two persons

Of course, I believed that the relationship between the applicant and his spouse is genuine and continuing. There are some reasons for that. First of all, from the calls I knew that they have been maintaining a good relationship for a very long time. Secondly, they had got the migration visas successfully, but the applicant gave it up because he was required to take care of his old father who is now 96 years old.

因為用continuing不知是什麼意思,所以不改了