改英文字問題Thanks!

line 2: beautful --> beautiful

line 3: have --> are (it is wrong for you to use "there has/have" in English)

line 4: "of" should be added ("because" should be either followed by a complete sentence or "of + noun")

line 5: as --> so

line 6: but --> and (there isn't any contrast between two parts of the sentence)

line 7: this --> the

line 8: While --> When

line 9: and --> but

line 10: her --> his (Hou Yi is a man -__-)

line 11: since --> so ( "Since" is used to give reasons but now we are talking about the results so we should use "so". )

line 12: pills --> pill (because of "a")

line 13: greedy --> greedily ("greedy" is an adjective and you should use an abverb.)

line 14: feels --> felt (past event)

line 15: rises --> rose (past event again)

line 16: himself --> herself (Chang Er is a woman -___-)