請俾d意見..about eng

In addition, I am the mumber of YMCA Social Service Team where I can take part in different voluntary activities , such as raising money for charity , flag rasing , to visit rest home, cleaning etc. All activities search by ourself , sometimes we will help some charities raising money , we have to go to the class one by one for promote the activities . I think we should have a great caring and patient.

...呢d系我自己作既英文, 唔知大家看唔看得明我講咩呢.? 請俾d意見啊...有咩可以改進既地方...
有更好既請幫我改改啊
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