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The result of HKCEE which were released on this Wednesday,over 20000 vacancies have been filled in past two days.Frustration,sadness and confusion was appearing to the majority of surplus Form 5 students. During the previous days, over ( million !? ) ten thousand students suffered in thunderstorm in order to seek an unoccupied vacancies to advance Form 6.But that was mere one-seven could be offered an individual admission amongst the surplus students.Aside from those students would be rejected in accordance with the application procedure.

2007-08-11 14:09:29 補充：
correction : line 5 : one-seven --- one-seventh

The RESULTS of HKCEE which HAVE BEEN released on Wednesday, over 20,000 places WERE SNAPPED up over the past two days. FORM FIVE STUDENTS THAT FEELS LOST, AFRAID AND CONFUSED ARE EVERYWHERE. IN these couple of days, more than A million students ARE CHALLENGING the THREATS of rain and bad weather in order to seek one of the few remaining form six vacancies. Since THE LAW OF SOCIETY ELIMINATES THE WEAK, ONLY ONE AMONG SEVEN CAN GET THE TICKET.