People l meet on bus 2

Today l meet her on bus, My heart was break ,as she is fairy in my mind.
she helping the trouble children.l want to become the trouble boy,so that l could to
approach her .l know l was dreaming ,but l need become true ,Let action.

有些少不對, 應改為:
Today I'd met her on a bus, my heart was broken as she is a fairy in my mind. She help the troubled children, I wish I am one of the troubled boys, so that I can approach her. I know it is just a dream, however, I wish it would come true.

Hope it is acceptable.

Today I met her in the bus. My heart was broken but she was a fairy in my mind. She was helping some trouble children. I wish I was one of them so I could approach her. I knew I was dreaming but I want that to become true. Let's action!



( i changed quite a bit so it made them sound better)

Today l meat her on bus, My heart was broken ,as she was a fairy to me.
she helped the children in trouble.l wanted to become the troublesome boy,so that l could approach her .l knew l was dreaming ,but l needed it to become true ,Let's take action.

2007-08-01 10:12:25 補充：
He isa asking us to find out the mistakes.....Not talking about his experience...

2007-08-01 10:12:54 補充：
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