空姐application letter! 幫幫手改下！ 20分

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1. 千其唔好話你 education 唔夠﹐application letter 一定要positive
2. 就算你鍾意細路都唔洗講咁多﹐你唔係申請nanny.
3. 我唔知你係啱啱讀完書﹐最好加多小小你其他的工作經驗, 因為你封信內容極缺乏工作經驗。
4. 你係唔係想申請港龍﹖港龍係Dragonair, 唔係Dragon Airline

Being a flight attendant has always been my dream since I was a child. As a cabin crew, I will have the opportunity to broaden my horizon, learning new things and meeting different people all around the world. I am independent and mature, and with such qualities, I will be able to solve any kind of problems on the flight.

With my experience and personality, I am confident that I can make a successful flight attendant. I am out going and pleasant. I love to smile and would like to share the happiness with others. I love to communicate with new people, as well providing helps to the handicapped, elderly, and especially to children.

I sincerely wish to join the Dragonair family. I would appreciate the opportunity to further discuss my resume on how to make a substantial contribution to your company.

To be a flight attendant HAS BEEN my dream job since I was a child. I would like to broaden my horizon, to learn new things and to meet different people all around the world. I dedicate MYSELF to be [不可以用 more] independent and mature while staying in other countries. I want to self-improvE by solving problems on flights.

I AM confident THAT I can make a successful flight attendant. Although I don’t have a good BACKGROUND IN education, my personality fits this job BEST. I am an out-going and pleasant person. I love to smile, and I would like to share my HAPPINESS with others.

I love to communicate with people and to meet new faces. I would like to help people, such as the handicapped, the elderly, AND especially children. I genuinely love to stay with children and to take care of them.

I sincerely want to be a part of Dragon Airline. If I am given a chance, I will definitely work hard to contributE to YOUR company!

改過的字用了大寫字母，還有原本的一些字側去了。

祝你好運！

2007-07-25 04:52:39 補充：
因爲是 application letter, 所以用正式 的 I am, 而不是 I'm.