病句．．．幫幫手～～

Omg...!!! The upon two answers are totally wrond..= =""" they didn't even find out the probelms...=0=


Here is my answer:

Can you let me know if you would like to see that?
We can go to shopping too,of course.
Also, if it will be your first visit to Hong Kong.
I think we should do plenty of sight-seeing.
Which part of Hong Knog would you like to see the most?
Please let me know in your next letter.
Oh, and don't forget the weather will be hot in July.
I am looking forward to see you!

---------------------------------------------------------------------

Hope this can help you^^

Can you let me know if you like to see that?
of course we can go to shopping too.
As if it will be your first visit to Hong Kong.
I think we shouid be plenty of sighseeing.
Which parts was you most to see in Hong Kong?
Please let me know in next letter.
Oh,and don't forget,the weather will hot at July.
I'm looking forward to seeing from you!

寫信?or 工課?好似好唔順咁,,,,,,,,,

can you let me know if you would like to see that?
We can go shopping
as it will be.....
which parts of HK....
the weather will be hot in July
I am looking forward to seeing from you