「有改善的空間」這一句有沒有語病？

“有改善的空間”
其實呢﹐呢句句子如果放係20年前﹐應該會比老師或者教授們狂插﹗
因為係好明顯既西化句子 - 衰在“的的不休”
有睇過思果關於“西化”字句論文的話﹐應該會知道我講緊乜。
“有改善空間” – that’s already ok la~!
PS: nowadays china’s author / students always commit to this westernized writing “habit” on one hand, and refuse to accept that they are in “fault” on the other…sigh!

2007-07-12 14:00:58 補充：
cause that's the only sentence you've given here. if you do not have the whole context provided, then it would be difficult to determin.

2007-07-12 14:04:28 補充：
Say the original text may sounds like "there is room for improvement". To me it would be perfectly fine to literally translate it into Chinese - simply because it has nothing in against the chinese syntax.

2007-07-12 14:05:00 補充：
You may feel that "有" is a bit weird and more or less quite westernized. So do I.Probably if it's regarding someone's performances, I'd translate it as "可以做得更好" - tthen it sounds like even more "chinese" rite?

2007-07-12 14:05:22 補充：
You may feel that "有"and "空間" are a bit weird and more or less quite westernized. So do I.Probably if it's regarding someone's performances, I'd translate it as "可以做得更好" - tthen it sounds like even more "chinese" rite?

2007-07-12 14:06:47 補充：
One more thing: I believe in dynamic equivalence

2007-07-16 17:23:44 補充：
out of town for a while and sorry for late supplementary:When we critisied "westernized", the fundemental basis is that we already have a usual saying in our mother language - chinese - while people import a western syntax and language structure to interpret them.

2007-07-16 17:36:27 補充：
思果had also said that westernization doesn't necessarily means critics, but also merits because sometimes it may bring along new vocabs and syntax and therefore enhance our own language. No doubt 「 有」和「空間」sounds quite westernized and if you're Chi. Lit student you may even find it preculiar

2007-07-16 17:45:54 補充：
but my point is, while「空間」could be a useful term as it makes our description even more visualized and easily known, 「 有」is not my cup of tea and personally I avoid using it unless it's a must.

2007-07-16 17:58:53 補充：
e.g.你有試過嗎﹖- 你曾經試過嗎﹖他有很多知己良朋 - 他知己良朋滿天下(有點誇張~)anyway just want you to understand my standpoint...又,個人經驗 - 如果必須用上"有",you may make it sounds more "chinese" by adding another word with it such as "尚有"...and of cuz you may think of many more.

2007-07-17 17:43:49 補充：
Exactly! Of cuz languages are interracting with each other and I know many in HK thinks that it's stupid not to follow the trend of "modern" writing, but to me it's something treasurable and I'd rather preserve the traditional chinese writings.