求助幫忙! (急)!! 這信有否問題? 而且請大家幫助寫信! (救人要緊)

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is XX From class Form 3 X. I would like to request your consideration for me to repeat Form 3 this year, I am aware my poor performance this year and realise I did not study well enough to achieve a good grade.

If you kindly give me another chance, I promise you that I will do my best to achieve the highest grade as possibe. This will have a dramatic impact for my future, please give a very serious consideration. Thank you for reading my letter.

Yours faithfully,

(signature)
(name)

家長信

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am the parent of XX from Form 3X, I am writing this to you to request your kind consideration for my son's to repeat his Form 3 study at your school this year, upon my son informed me about his result this year, I felt very disappointed, however, I feel it is best for him to repeat Form 3 this year, to achieve a better result.

As you may notice if my son cannot repeat his Form 3 study at your school, he will be extremely difficult to find another school for him to continue his study, which will affect his future whether from his future study or even his future employment. Therefore, please consider to allow XX to study Form 3 again.

Yours faithfully,

(signature)
(name)

Is that ok?

你的英文非常差, 文法錯之餘,讀起來又很無禮貌。建議你不要寄出,考慮改寫中文信之後直接約見校長/副校罷!