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唔係話英文好唔好, 但你抄左樓上o個篇就正都有排你改, 典形chi-english. 唔講作文格式, 咩topical sentense, 淨係gramma都執差懵, 我係亞sir 我一定比個rewrite 你! 用頭幾句黎同你終極拆解啦!
> "For me"(inappropiate opening), i prefer "go"(to + infinitives) to "__"(articles) Ocean
In my opinion, I prefer to go to the Ocean
> Park "will be better"(wrong expression) than The Peak "to go"(repeated) with friends.
Park rather than the Peak with my friends.
>"From"(perposition) Ocean "Peak", there "have"(wrong word) many "district"(plural)
In Ocean Park, there are many districts
>for "our different objective"(redundant words) us "to choice"(to + infinitives / noun).
for us to choose
>"Such as,"(we don't use such as in begining of sentences) we can "go to"(redundant)
For examples, we can
> play "the machine game"(wrong word), or "go"(to + infinitive) to see the pandagarden,
play the trill rides, or to go to see the pandagarden,
>or "travel"(to + infinitive / wrong word) "__"(perposition) the animal world,
or wandering around the animal world,
>"like the bird, fish, jelly fish."(wrong sentence structure)
to see the birds, fishes, jelly fish.
作文都係自己作好啦, 唔係英文邊有進步架!