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July 6th, 07. Sunny

I am writing my diary while taking the flight back home at the moment. I am very tired after the 3 day trip to Japan with my family. However, I really enjoyed this trip because this is my first time going to Japan, and I have visited many fantastic places.

On the second day of the trip, we took the bullet train to a place to see Sumo wrestling. After the match, we took a walk down the street. We encountered some women wearing beautiful kimonoes while walking, so we asked them to take a photo with us. They felt it's their pleasure to be in a photo with us.

On the last day of the trip, we went shopping in Ginza in the morning. We spent a lot of money in many huge department stores. In the afternoon, we took some photos of the snowy mountain before we left.

I had a fasinating trip with my family. I will certainly tell my classmates about this trip to Japan, and I am sure that they will all envy me.



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fixing grammatical errors:

I'm currently writing this diary on the plane back to Hong Kong. I'm so tried because I've just been on a trip to Japan for 3 days with my family. I really enjoyed this trip because it was the first time that I went to Japan, and I visited some fantastic places.

On the second day, we took the bullet train to a stadium where we watched a sumo wrestling match. After that, we saw some women wearing beautiful kimono on the street. We asked them to take pictures with us. Japanese people are so nice.

On the last day, we went shopping in Ginza in the morning. There were many department stores, and they were huge (of course, we spent a lot of money again)! In the afternoon, we left soon after we took some photos of the snow on the mountain.

Well, I had a fascinating trip. I will certainly tell my classmates that I have been to Japan. I bet they will be jealous of me.

July 6th, 07. Sunny

I am writing my diary while taking the flight back home at the moment. I am very tired after the 3 day trip to Japan with my family. However, I really enjoyed this trip because this is my first time going to Japan, and I have visited many fantastic places.

On the second day of the trip, we took the bullet train to a place to see Sumo wrestling. After the match, we took a walk down the street. We encountered some women wearing beautiful kimonoes while walking, so we asked them to take a photo with us. They felt it's their pleasure to be in a photo with us.

On the last day of the trip, we went shopping in Ginza in the morning. We spent a lot of money in many huge department stores. In the afternoon, we took some photos of the snowy mountain before we left.

I had a fasinating trip with my family. I will certainly tell my classmates about this trip to Japan, and I am sure that they will all envy me.