Do you like this poem I wrote?

2007-06-07 1:54 am
I am just a dreamer,
Yet I do not sleep.
My eyes rain,
But I cannot weep.
You see I dream of peace,
While I'm wide awake.
I'm afraid crying,
Would cause me to break.
So I stand firm,
And I put on a mask of pride.
While I hide,
All the pain inside.
Like a cancer,
That eats away my soul.
Leaving just a shell,
To live on and grow old.
What makes a baby grow,
From a loving slate?
Into a man or woman,
That preaches hate?
That would deny,
The very love of kin.
And want to fill the world with misery and sin.
When we should,
All embrace the love.
That's been given,
By the God of Love!
更新1:

Commonsense, I am saved by the Mercy of God Almighty and the Blood of My Savior Jesus Christ.

更新2:

Fayewred, I beg to differ. I write peoms as a response to some of the injustices I see here on yahoo. I am very optimistic in other writings. Furthermore, religion doesn't ruin the world. It gives hope to the world. Misuse of religion and God's Word causes harm. Those cries are committed by men. Not God.

回答 (15)

2007-06-07 2:46 am
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You are very artistically inclined and God has graced your lips with the power of Words. I love it...God uses what the enemy meant for bad to inspire you to write, and through the injustices you see, or the pain you feel. I love words as well, and poetry. Keep going forward in Jesus name!
2007-06-07 2:05 am
I think Your Poem Is Beautiful. and I do believe God Has Inspired you To write it, and He Has Anointed It , (very Much) . You Have a Beautiful Gift>>>>>Always use it for GOD> He will be very Pleased, I'm Sure. (smile)
2007-06-07 2:00 am
Yes i love it
2007-06-07 2:00 am
Yes, I do. Very nicely written, so what are you going to do about it ? Keep on dreaming poem or start living the Truth ?

I wish you well and all those who read will be awaken to the truth and start living By His Word -The truth, The Way and The Life. The Word made Flesh is Jesus Christ.

Believe on Him and you have everlasting life.
2007-06-07 1:59 am
its beautiful. except it sounds kinda like a riddle
2007-06-07 1:58 am
Awesome...
2007-06-07 1:58 am
Very nice. Thank you for sharing!!!
2007-06-07 1:57 am
How deep and sad. Let us hope and pray for peace soon.Thank you for sharing.You write beautifully.
2007-06-07 6:07 am
Yes I do like it. And pray that my voice never preaches hate. Thanks for sharing.

Blessings bro.
2007-06-07 2:18 am
You're way better than Autum Ashante.
2007-06-07 2:04 am
i love it! youre super cool!
but why do you have to be so pessimistic?
there are plenty of good people out there doing good things everyday, and this world is so much more than just misery and sin. human beings are lovely, well at least we are doing our best. of cus we can be better, but we are only human! we are all trying we are all trying we are all trying!!!
god? god? religion is making the world worse. i hate religion. get a life and live it right.
2007-06-07 2:01 am
Thanks for sharing your talents with us. ( ^ _ ^ ) Awesome poem!


Semper Fi Devil Dog! Rah!
2007-06-07 1:58 am
thats really nice, i love it! you might want to make sure noone will steal it and say it was theres. i'm just not to sure about the last line...
2016-05-18 9:27 pm
You are so talented. I know I've said that before. This is a deep meaningful poem, it may be a different style than you use now but it is so good to me. Drown my soul in wash of sorrow. Build my doubts and leave me hallow. You know I adore you. I wish I could open up the way you do.
2007-06-07 1:57 am
see


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