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Ocean Park and HK Disneyland are the theme parks in HK. Ocean Park takes ocean as the comprehensive topic. And HK Disneyland takes fairy tale as topic. Therefore, they are two different theme parks in HK.
My favourite theme park is Ocean Park. ' Why do you like it?' First, the admission price of Ocean Park is cheaper than HK Disneyland. Then, there’s only one Ocean Park in the world but other countries also have Disneyland.
Thus, HK disneyland isn't the only choice for the tourists or HK citizen. Next, although HK Disneyland is bigger than Ocean Park,it is too small when it compare with other Disneyland. If the tourists want to visit Disneyland, they prefer to go to other country's Disneyland.
In addition, Ocean Park is more suitable for all ages of people to visit than HK Disneyland.It is because HK Disneyland may just suitable for young people but not quite able for older ones.Ocean Park has more type of attractions than Hong Kong Disneyland. There are places for animals, land animals.
Also, children and adult can play the exciting games in Ocean Park. HK Disneyland has four topic parks, but it only around the fairy tales and Disney cartoon characters such as Cinderella, Micky mouse etc.

P.S.:There will have some mistakes inside....,..maybe........but most of them I have corrected it.

I have made my correction in CAPTITAL LETTER. Coz I cant drop colors to the words, pls be patient to seek my corrections...ha...


THE Ocean Park and THE HK Disneyland are THE TWO MAIN theme parkS in HK. THE Ocean Park takes ocean as the comprehensive topic WHILE THE HK Disneyland takes fairy tale as ITS OWN. Therefore, they BOTH WIN A COMPETITIVE POPULARITY IN HONG KONG THOUGH THEY ARE RUNNING IN TWO DISTINCT STYLES.
My favourite theme park is THE Ocean Park. ONE OF THE VERY VITAL REASONS IT CHERISHES ME IS THAT the ENTRANCE price OF THE Ocean Park is MUCH cheaper than THAT OFFERED BY THE HK Disneyland. AND WHAT IS MORE IMPORTANT, THE Ocean Park is SOMEWHAT MORE A UNIQUE WONDERLAND THAT THE DISNEYLAND WHEN THE LATTER CAN STILL BE FOUND IN THE OTHER PARTS AROUND THE WORLD.

Thus, THE HK disneyland isn't the only choice for the tourists or HK citizen. Although IT is bigger than THE Ocean Park (ARE YOU SURE??) ,WHILE IT IS COMPARED WITH THOSE IN THE OTHER COUNTRIES, HOWEVER, IT IS TOO SMALL. If the tourists want to visit THE Disneyland, they prefer TURNING THEIR STEPS OVER THE other country's Disneyland.


In addition, THE Ocean Park EMUSES A LARGE AGE RANGE OF VISITORS THAN THE HK DISNEYLAND CAN. WHILE THE LATTER TAKES MORE CARE FOR THE YOUTH, THE OCEAN PARK PROVIDES PROGRAMS FOR ALMOST ALL AGED-GROUPS, INCLUDING THE ELDERLY.


WHILE PEOPLE STATES THAT THE HK Disneyland has A NUMBER OF shops for visiters to buy souvenirs and restaurants FOR MEAL, THE Ocean Park also PROVIDES a PLENTY OF shops and restaurants too. WHAT IS MORE, IN THE Ocean Park, there is a special place to HAVE FUN WITH THE TWO PANDAS WHICH HAD TAKEN A LONG JOURNEY FROM THE MAINLAND CHINA TOO!

Although THE Ocean Park is great now, there should be a zoo for SMALLER animals like THE hamster, ETC..so THAT THE children would ALSO HAVE MORE CHANCES TO GET ALONG WITH THE ANIMALS.



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