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This is our team member: Peter , Tommy , Jun. Today we will present our project, Our topic is improvement for 61336. Today we have 4 parts in the presentation. , the first part is introduction, information about survey, conclusion and suggestion.
This report shows us what school should do to improve this program.
From 10 april to 14 april. We were interviewed thirty 61336 students in school.
我英文好屎..可唔可以幫下我 check 下(1)
2007-05-21 6:28 am
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2007-05-21 8:16 am
如果你系直接做presentation. 你要一啲開始語 :
Good afternoon / morning everybody!
May I introduce our team's member? Peter, Tommy and Jun.. (應該系你要望住你啲memeber續一介紹).
We will illustrate our project result of "improvement of 61336" that invloves 4 parts in our presentation; introduction, statistics, conclusion and suggestion.
The RESULT shows that (our?? or?...) campus should (系唔系用could好少少?) improve the 61336 program in specific areas. (你仲應該做個開埸白, 講講你大約問左啲乜呀~~)
From 10 April to 14 april, we interviewed thirty 61336 students in (our? or..?.. the) campus to collect their opinions in response to the "improvement of 61336".
乜嘢school? 你自己嗰間? 如果有幾間就要講清楚..
另外, 唔系好明你講乜what school should do to improve this program. 你唔系話KIND話?
不過, 我估你系唔系講有啲乜要改善? 如果系, 如上寫法就ok.
總括 : 你個presentation開頭比較弱, 唔能夠引起audience興趣聽落去.. 內容唔夠豐富, marking會好底份. 雖然我建議你豐富, 但唔系要過份詳細. 不過, 真系玥保充少少呢.. 里個已經唔只系英文問題, 而系你個整理同安排上嘅問題.
2007-05-21 00:20:59 補充：
更改 :From 10 April to 14 april, we interviewed thirty 61336 students in (our? or..?.. the) campus (that collected) their opinions in response to the "improvement of 61336".
Good afternoon / morning everybody!
May I introduce our team's member? Peter, Tommy and Jun.. (應該系你要望住你啲memeber續一介紹).
We will illustrate our project result of "improvement of 61336" that invloves 4 parts in our presentation; introduction, statistics, conclusion and suggestion.
The RESULT shows that (our?? or?...) campus should (系唔系用could好少少?) improve the 61336 program in specific areas. (你仲應該做個開埸白, 講講你大約問左啲乜呀~~)
From 10 April to 14 april, we interviewed thirty 61336 students in (our? or..?.. the) campus to collect their opinions in response to the "improvement of 61336".
乜嘢school? 你自己嗰間? 如果有幾間就要講清楚..
另外, 唔系好明你講乜what school should do to improve this program. 你唔系話KIND話?
不過, 我估你系唔系講有啲乜要改善? 如果系, 如上寫法就ok.
總括 : 你個presentation開頭比較弱, 唔能夠引起audience興趣聽落去.. 內容唔夠豐富, marking會好底份. 雖然我建議你豐富, 但唔系要過份詳細. 不過, 真系玥保充少少呢.. 里個已經唔只系英文問題, 而系你個整理同安排上嘅問題.
2007-05-21 00:20:59 補充：
更改 :From 10 April to 14 april, we interviewed thirty 61336 students in (our? or..?.. the) campus (that collected) their opinions in response to the "improvement of 61336".
參考: my knowledge (我啲英文算唔錯) - 我都讀僅MBA - business research
2007-05-21 7:31 am
Peter, Tommy and Jun are my team members. Today, we will like to present out project on the improvement for 61336. There are 4 parts to our presentation. The first part of the project is introduction, information about some surveys, conclusion, and suggestion. This report shows us what can the school do to improve this program. Throughout April 10 to 14, we interviewed thirty 61336 students in the school.
2007-05-22 01:34:18 補充：
you should always put month first, then day. If you want to put year, put a comma after the day then put the year. April 10 or April 10, 2007
2007-05-22 01:34:18 補充：
you should always put month first, then day. If you want to put year, put a comma after the day then put the year. April 10 or April 10, 2007
參考: myself
2007-05-21 6:45 am
Our team member are Peter, tommyand jun. Today we are going to present our project, our topic is improvement for 61336.
We have four parts for the presentation. The four parts are introduction, information about the survey,conclusion and suggestion respectively.
This report shown us what should school do to improve this program.
From 10 April to 14 April, we interviewed thirty students in school.
We have four parts for the presentation. The four parts are introduction, information about the survey,conclusion and suggestion respectively.
This report shown us what should school do to improve this program.
From 10 April to 14 April, we interviewed thirty students in school.
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