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Yesterday was my birthday. I had a party at my tutor's home. My classmates came to my birthday party after school. We ate (shared) a beautiful birthday cake, sang (some) songs and played games. We were very happy. But all good things must come to (an) end. We said good bye at seven o'clock. (Sure) we had a very good time there.

If you insist to go with your original text, I think it is pretty good & almost no mistakes. But, I'll suggest to change or add as bracketed.

I hope you like it.

Yesterday was my birthday. I open my birthday party at tutor's home and invited classmates to attend after school We ate birthday cake at the party. I liked the design of that cake because it was so beauty. During the party, we were singing and played games. All of us felt so happy and nobody want to leave at this moment. Finally, we said goodbye at seven o'clock and have a good memory in mind.

不好意思， 我將部份句子改了，希望你合用

Yesturday, it was my birthday. I had a very fun party at my tutor's/teacher's home. Most of my classmates came to my party after school. We had a very delicious birthday cake that made by my(parents, friends...). Then they sang a birthday song for me and played games. We were having a great time , but however, things needed to be end. We said goodbye to each other at seven o'clock.

Yesterday was my birthday. I had a party at tutor's home.

My classmates came to my birthday party after left school. We ate a beautiful birthday cake, sang songs and played some games. most of us were very happy. However, all good things must have an end. We left at seven o'clock.