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2007-05-10 8:57 pm
I really very much have the interest to be engaged in this profession,
although my degree is not high, moreover English proficiency not too good,
I meet the earnest efforts study.
I hoped can give me an opportunity to go this work to complete.
Thank you very much!

請大家同我將e一段野改到最好!
thx
p.s.grammer千其唔好錯呀

回答 (3)

2007-05-10 10:52 pm
✔ 最佳答案
幸好你先讓yahoo知識的朋友們給你改這篇求職信,不然,擔保你一定落第。因為這信的文法有很多錯的地方,甚至有些地方更詞不達意,如”I meet the earnest efforts study”又如degree,因degree其中一個解釋是position in society(社會地位),所以也會容易給人誤解。我們可用qualification便可,qualification是指資格,包括:學業,專業,技能等等。
以下是改了後的內容,希望幫到你:
I am very keen to work in this profession. Although my qualification is not very high and my English (is) not good, yet I will try my best to enhance my competency by any means. I would be grateful if you would kindly grant me an opportunity.

(is):可以省略
2007-05-10 9:19 pm
I am interested in this profession very much although I don't have very outstanding academic performance and my English is not very good .However, I will try my best to spend more time on futher study. I deeply hope that you would like to give me a chance to work in your company.Thank you very much!
參考: me
2007-05-10 9:16 pm
I have a huge passion on this profession, although my academic level may not meet the required qualification. Moreover, my English proficiency is not good enough, so I am eager to make more efforets in studying English.
Hopefullay, you could offer me an apportuinity to take this occupation. Thank You~~
參考: Longman Grammer Dictionary


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