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「I have my best friend. Her name is carol. 」= 又長, 又悶.. 要改
「She is very kind and happy.」 = 佢系個開心果, 英文用cheerful.
「 She smiles all day.」= 成日咁開心系用always呢~~~
=> Carol is my best friend. She is very kind and cheerful with lovely smile always.
「When I am in a bad mood. She will comfort me. When I am happy. She will share with my joy. 」=又長, 又悶.. 要改 ==> 其實講來講去咪系「分享」/「照顧」.......
=> No matter I am happy or in a bad mood, she always (share interests with me) / (takes care me).
「She likes playing computer games. We love to talk to each other about PC games.」
= 因為>> 你地中意一齊傾電腦games, 先至會分享, 所以=大家都中意啦. 而且, 里句又長, 又悶.. 要改. 唔洗前後出現computer games同埋PC games啦
=> As we like playing computer games a lot, we share our thoughts always.
「Sometimes she helps me to do homework.」= 如果真系佢幫,唔系唔得, 不過話曬功課就唔好咁寫. 話佢教你做功課會好啲.
「 She is good at English. She always gets good marks in it. She is the first of my class.」
= 里兩句次序唔改有啲怪.. 不如先講佢成績好, 所以教你會好啲.. logically啲.
=> She is good (IN) English with (high marking). As her enblish is ranked as the best in my class, she teaches me doing homework sometimes.
2007-04-27 02:52:19 補充:
整句第一part :Carol is my best friend. She is very kind and cheerful with lovely smile always. No matter I am happy or in a bad mood, she always (share interests with me) / (takes care me). As we like playing computer games a lot, we share our thoughts always.
2007-04-27 02:53:31 補充:
整句第2part : 因為太多句, 加個連接詞好啲.(Besides), She is good (IN) English with (high marking). As her english is ranked as the best in my class, she teaches me doing homework sometimes.
2007-04-27 02:55:14 補充:
整句第一part : (另一寫法 留意最後一句)Carol is my best friend. She is very kind and cheerful with lovely smile always. No matter I am happy or in a bad mood, she always (share interests with me) / (takes care me). (Moreover,) we like playing computer games a lot (and share) our thoughts always.