幫幫我ｄ文法呀！！謝謝～

I chose this topic because it reminds me of those sports days organized by secondary schools. I remember those memorable moments when we tried our very best to assure our capability.

I have selected to use a mind-map to represent my ideas.

The audience segment that I am targeting is ... students. I hope, by showing to the students my mind-map, they will learn about the origin of sports days and gain interests in joining the sports day next year.

sorry呀，唔係好明，你既意思，你最尾係咪話：等d學生睇左之後，我希望佢地可以知道sports day既由來，同埋會有興趣…

有d位要留意：

sports day係有s響個sport後面

一開始果度唔係好make sense，我梗硬改左，請用中文諗諗：你話你個topic係體育日，因為同中學既體育日有d似…呢句個問題係：你o岩o岩講完個topic，跟住你話同中學體育日相似，咁你姐係講話個”主題”同”中學體育日”有d似，唔係”大學體育日”同”中學體育日”有d似，”主題”點可以同”體育日”相似呢？唔知你明唔明我講乜呢？

唔好用And黎做一句既開頭

仲有你話：個主題可以令人回憶返中學既時期，與証明自己既能力…嗯，”主題”係可以令人回憶，但係”主題”點可以”証明自己既能力”，你想講既係”體育日”可以”証明自己既能力”吧？其實唔好話英文，中文聽起黎都覺得怪怪咁

以上係個人意見，如果有咩得罪唔好見怪，但係如果你有咩問題，歡迎再問

The topic i chose is: "Sport / Athletics Day in university", the reason i have chosen this topic is because it's similiar to the Sport / Athletics Day in high schools, this will bring many high school memories to many people along with the idea of proving one's abilities.
I've identified my specific audience as ..... students. After my presentation, it is my hope that the students will have a better knowledge of what's going on on a
Sport/ Athletics Day and therefore have a better interest in joining the next year's Sport / Athletics Day.