sudents problems 請問這段英文,文法上有錯誤嗎? 會考用的,請指點指點 thank you.

Besides, Hong Kong Students have to do a lot of homework and they are even busier than adults. No matter how diligent they are, the only thing that they achieve is to realise how to get a better result. They lose their sentiments as they always keep in touch with lots of cool books.

*^* 【No 『mater』】is a spelling mistake, it should be｛No 〔matter〕｝

*^* 【the only thing they achieve is to realise how to get a better result】add 『that』, 【the only thing that they achieve is to realise how to get a better result】to connect the two sentences' structure

^+^ 【as】here is meaned 因為, so you use「because / since / due to」, they are the same meaning

^_^ 【plenty of】here is meaned 很多, but the main meaning of this is 充足, so it should change to be 『lots of / many ...』

*^* 【day after day】should be delete, it is unnecessary, because it can be find the same meaning in the last sentence, the word『always』

Students -> students
mater -> matter
the only thing they achieve is to realise how to get a better result < 你想講d咩? 點解用achieve呢個字? 我唔係好明 =)

2007-04-23 17:56:45 補充：
The Microsoft Word cannot point out all the mistakes. It can't see your usage problems.