睇下篇英文 作文得唔得

冇題目, 睇唔到內容 OK 唔 OK; 單睇你篇文, 幫你執咗少少...

唔好用 yesterday!! 響 yesterday 先啱啱買, 你邊度同到佢做咁多嘢呢?
唔好用 always!! 用 always 講嗰 d 動作係無時無刻都做的 ... 你冇可能無時無刻都同佢沖涼&玩 game; 用 often 或 usually 會好 d.


Last month, I went to Pet Shop to buy a dog. It's name is Ben. Ben is very cute and it likes eating meat. I often play ball games with it. When I throw out a ball, it will take the ball back to me at once. I sometimes walk in the garden with Ben. I like Ben very much.

(啱啱好 60 字)

2007-04-15 20:36:21 補充：
刪咗你少少內容, 因為突字數執咗少少次序, 因同上文下理要有少少 "啦加" 先得還有, 動物的代名詞一定係用 'it'

I went to the OK Pet Shop yesterday and bought a dog which is called Ben.I love it because It is very cute.Its favourite food are bones and meat.I always wash its body and play ball games with it.I throw out a ball and it return the ball quickly.I usually walk with Ben in the garden.

very good i love it

Yesterday,I went to the OK Pet Shop and bought a dog.It 's name is Ben.He is very cute.I always wash his boby and play ball games with him.I usually walk in the garden with it .It likes bones and meat best. I like Ben very much.


好像還怪怪的= =
可是差不多啦。