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One day, Paul made a mistake when he had on the way to school. At a bus stop, Paul was reading a book. The bus stopped and the bus was going to Tsim Sha Tsui. Inside the bus, there were many people slept, listening music and some of them were chatting. Paul was reading the book when he travelling on bus, later on he found that the bus was not the route to school. Paul got off from the bus and said,'Oh, I got on the wrong one!'. Paul back to school at last.

One day, Paul made a mistake on his way to school. At bus stop, Paul was reading a book. A bus came, and the bus was going to Tsim Sha Tsui. In the bus some people slept, listened to music, talk with their friends. Paul was reading the book, during bus. When Paul finished reading, he noticed the bus was not going to his school. Paul got off the bus said, and said “Oh, I got on the wrong bus”. Paul went back to school finally.

2007-04-14 11:46:11 補充：
再改 Some people slept, listened to music, or talk with their friends in the bus. Paul continued reading the book, during bus.

One day, Paul made a mistake on his way to school. At the bus stop, Paul was reading a book. One bus came, but the bus is going to Tsim Sha Tsui. IN the bus, some people slept. Some people listened to music. Some poeple sopke to their friends. Paul was reading a book in the bus. After reading the book, Paul saw the bus didn't go to his school. Paul got off the bus and said, "Oh! I got on the wrong bus!" Finally, Paul went to school at last.

One day,Paul made a mistake on his way to school.At the bus stop,
Paul was reading a book.
One bus came,the bus is went to Tsim Sha Tsui.In bus some people were sleeping.
Some people were listening music.
Some people were speaking to their friends.
Paul was reading the book in the bus.
Paul has found that the bus didn't go to his school after he finished reading.
Paul went out the bus and said'Oh,I got on the wrong bus!' at last Paul went to school in time.