英文 唔該 help 我睇下 grammar!!!!! ths 續續

Many mistakes!! Should be:
On the other hand, technology improves our lives and is good to the economic development. Computers make the operation of companies easier and the statistics more accurate. Also, enterprises can advertise their products on the Internet. This can spread the product to other countries.

On the other hand, technology improves our living standards as well as economic developments. With computerization, most institutes operate more efficiently and the information system become more accurate/reliable. In addition, business enterprises may advertise their products over the internet. Furthmore, communicate globally is more convenient.

2007-04-07 12:17:03 補充：
sorry, it's Furthermore

One the other hand, technology which improves our lives (plural of life)
is good for economic development.
( On the other hand = 在另一方面， 代表相反，就是与前一个句子相连的，
或者需要考虑到的。
所以，不需要放 as well）
如：
I want to keep fit. On the other hand, she invites me to have buffer.
I'm trying to calm her down. On the other hand, he keeps on scolding her.

Computers make the operation of institutes more efficient
and the information of documents more accurate.
( Computers 就足以明白，不用指定那些，因为全部电脑都能提高效率）

Also不大适合，用Moreover（一样意思， 而且，此外，再说）较好。
Moreover, the enterprises may advertise the products in the internet
which can make the communication with other countries more convenient.
@which is more convenient in communicating with other countries
@which can make a better communication with other countries .
~communication 通常都用better @effective来形容。

(advertise 不用放 for,
如要放：
Moreover, the enterprises may put/place an advertisement for the products in the internet.)

希望能够帮到你。

On the other hand, technology(spelling error) had improve our life, and had

been very helpful with our economic development and growth. For example, the

computers had help make our operation at different institutes more efficient and had

also help us in documenting different informations by making it more accurate. Also, the

enterprise( spelling error) uses the computers for advertising their products on the

internet, which had make our communication with other countries more convient and

easy.

I think techology and which between do not need a comma, others I think OK.