幫我改文+評語緊急!!!!20分

用戶96386

2007-03-30 2:56 am

title:
we have five foreign fifth form students visiting us for a week. Can you please make suggestion about things for them to do over the friday evening and weekend
these activities should:
be fun for teenagers
teach them or show them something about Hong Kong
Not cost too much!
write about 100 words

回答 (2)

Wasser

2007-03-31 2:10 am

✔ 最佳答案

I am sorry to tell you that you have made some typing mistakes in your essay.
Also, you have used the same expression---"in my opinion" repeatedly .
You should try to use different phrases to express your ideas, for example,moreover.
You have some grammar mistakes,too.
eg1)"We can see special birds believe that the activity be fun for teenagers."
---> We can see special birds that I believe the activity will be fun for teenagers.
grammar:3/5
content:4/5
I hope you will not blame me for giving you these marks.^^*

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用戶96066

2007-03-30 3:01 am

好!好! la!

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幫我改文+評語 緊急!!!!20分

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幫我改文+評語緊急!!!!20分