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According to table 9, only 16.7% of respondents with monthly income of less than $20,000 give affirmative response about their intention of pursuing a doctorate. Therefore, we can reasonably assume that people with lower income are less intended(likely) to pursue higher education level.

開頭第一句先客觀指出有關數據，再按此作出推論。
可以用一句作出有關數據的總結，可以省略percentage(百分比)字眼及重複數據(16.7%)。

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Table 9 told us that only 16.7% of the respondents with income less than $20,000 have answered (Yes) - meaning only 16.7% would pursue a Doctorate Degree. It suggested that people with low income would have less intention to pursuit higher education.


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