幫我改下英文作文~20點!!!

************hihi~請注意ｏｆｆ　ｔｏｐｉｃ！！
因為～”Topic:．　．　．　．　 Discuss the CAUSE of this problem""

you direction is now keeping explain the situation or the problem~ but not or less talking about the CAUSE~!! so. . . . (hope you don't mind)

我會做ｇｒａｍｍａ　ｃｈｅｃｋｉｎｇ^^～但your 內容可能要(小心)再寫啊～～＾＾
becaue 內容 should be the resaon or the cause of problem = 原因
example:
- stress of parent
- parent with inadequate education teaching them how to release stress.
- parent with inadequate education teaching them how to protect and education their next generation~
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Child abuse has been recently increased in Hong Kong, which make a great deal of our concern. Although people acknowledge that abusing children is immoral and illegal, why do some parents or people still engage in such unlawful behavior?

What are the effects on the child being abused? What action we can take to stop the case? What the Hong Kong government can do to enhance the public awarenesses on the protection of children?

All parents love their children in the world; however, some of them use the wrong method to teach their children. There is a saying of " Actions speak louder than words" in chinese mind.

In fact, it is not always true. Another reason for the problem is lacking communication among family members; not only the parents have to communicate with each other, but also the parents have to communicate with children.

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**PS 內容可能要小心再寫!!! hope i can hep you^^

Nowadays,the number of cases of child abuse reported has been increasing in Hong Kong. Although most parents acknowledge that abusing child is both immoral and illegal,why do they still engage in this kind of unlawful behavior?



What are the effects on the victims? What can we do to prevent this kind of activity? What can the government do to enhance the public' s awareness of the protection of children in Hong Kong?

2007-03-28 13:38:53 補充：
As a matter of fact,to use in the wrong way is at the bottom of all great mistakes. I know that parents love their child so much,but only using this inflexible method to teach the child is not the best way. There is a Chinese saying that goes,"Actions speak louder than words".

2007-03-28 13:38:54 補充：
As a matter of fact,to use in the wrong way is at the bottom of all great mistakes. I know that parents love their child so much,but only using this inflexible method to teach the child is not the best way. There is a Chinese saying that goes,"Actions speak louder than words".

2007-03-28 13:40:17 補充：
Having said so,it is not always true. Another reason for this problem is lacking communication among the family. Not only father and mother have to communicate themselves,but also parents and child have to communicate with each other.