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1st line: " I said Janathan the suspect haves sunglasses,cap and is wearing a white T-shirt and black throuse. "
改成﹕
" I told Jonathan that the suspect was wearing sunglasses, a cap, white T-shirt and black trousers. "

1) have 唔會有 s
2) suspect 為第3身單數，如果用都用 has
3) 你指 the suspect 戴眼鏡，所以動詞是wear, have glasses 是Chinglish(中文式的英文)
4) 用 past continuous tense " was wearing " 因為他當時戴緊
5) 加 that 因這是 reported speech 的慣常用法 -
e.g. He told me that May was getting married.
6) 注意串法 - trousers, Johnathan

" Next,the suspect went to entrance. "
改成:
" Then the suspect just came up to / came in through the entrance. "

1) next 同 then 用法不一，then 的意思是然後。
同一個人做完一件事隨即做另一件事亦可用next,
e.g. the suspect tied her up, next he robbed her house.
2) 加 just, 意即剛巧
3) went to the entrance 不是一般說法，建議改成
- came up to the entrance = move towards the entrance 或
- came in through the entrance = 經入口進來
4) entrance 漏了 article " the "

" Jonathan had saw he. When Jonathan said ' stop ' "
改成
" When Johnathan saw him, he shouted ' stop! ' "

1) 無 had saw 這樣的tense。 " had seen " 就有，是 present perfect, 表示一件過去的事在另一件過去的事之前發生。e.g. I had completed my homework before I watched TV.
2) 你這裡只需要過去式saw
3) he 和 him 同指他，但用於句子不同位置，就咁解好難明，多做練習啦，就領悟o架啦！
4) 留意 when 用法 -
e.g. When I came in, she cried, " my God! " 或
She cried, " my God! " when I came in.
5) 這兒指大叫，所以用shouted, said只是一般說話

" Next,he straggling for the susupect, but the suspect is stronger than Jonathan,So Jonathan is so pain. '
改成﹕
" Then he struggled with the suspect, but since the suspect was stronger than him, he suffered. "

1) 注意 struggle 串法, 同人打架，preposition 用 with (e.g, I fight with him, I read with him, I go out with him...)
2) 注意 tense - 應用simple past過去式 - struggled, was, suffered
3) 用 greatly suffered 吃了很大苦頭, 比was so painful意思較恰當

" Finally, a policeman helped stop struggling the suspect. "
改成﹕
" Finally, a policeman helped to stop the fighting. "

1) " to stop " 是 infinitive;
無 to 是 bare infinitive, 不是很多情形用 bare infinitive -
e.g. I hear him sing / I watch the bird fly - ' sing, watch ' 是有關觀感的動詞
e.g. you must do it / you can do it - 用於must、can等句子
2) 用 the fighting (這場打鬥) 比較簡潔正確

" Then,I went to entrance when think Jonathan is very brave. "
改成﹕
" After the fighting stopped, I went up to the entrance to thank Johnathan for his bravery. "

1) then 用得太多啦，所以改成 ' After the fighting stopped, '
2) 用 went up to 唔用 went to 之前已解釋
3) 串錯字啦，多謝是thank 唔o係 think, think o係稔
e.g. I thank May for her kindness; I thank God for his help
4) 因為他的勇敢而道謝，這兒勇敢是noun名詞，所以用bravery, brave 是形容詞