這句英文有沒有錯??

" I will be appreciated " should be corrected as"
" IT WOULD be GREATLY appreciated " or "IT SHOULD be GREATLY appreciated"

注意﹕" I will be appreciated " 即指 "你會被受欣賞" - 這是此句最大的錯處！

用" would " / " should " 而不用 " will " 是客套的用法，也是慣常的用法！

用 would 就不用 kindly，太累贅。

全句可改成﹕
" Thank you for your kind attention and it should be greatly appreciated if you would give me a reference letter" or
" Thank you for your kind attention and it would be greatly appreciated if you could give me a reference letter "

ps. " would " 同 " could " 同樣是客套用語

2007-03-15 01:25:38 補充：
typo: 注意﹕" I will be appreciated " 即指 " 你會被受欣賞 " - 這是此句最大的錯處！應改成注意﹕" I will be appreciated " 即指 " 我會被受欣賞 " - 這是此句最大的錯處！因此 " I " 必須改為 " It " - " It should be greatly appreciated " 意指「這樣會受到我的萬分讚賞」（被動式）

2007-03-15 01:34:13 補充：
信我， it should be appreciated 是慣常的用語，無人講 I should be appreciated o架！

這句英文有問題。

Thank you for your kind attention and 沒有錯。

I will be appreciated 有問題。這裡是被動形，指{我會被感激}。改成：
I will appreciate我會被感激}

if you would kindly give me a reference letter. 沒有大問題。但give可以寫成write。因為通常是先寫後給。請求用could，不應用would。

Kind完又kindly也非常長氣。

Thank you for your attention. I will appreciate if you could kindly write me a reference letter. 應是比較好的方法。

不過如果你問我應點做，寫得reference letter，應該都係識你的人。我建議打電話或約見，口頭問可唔可以。然後先寄封多謝信，內加其他詳情。咁會有人情味一些。佢寫都寫得開心D。

2007-03-14 20:30:04 補充：
第四行 typo：I will appreciate {我會感激}

Thank you for your kind attention and I will be appreciated if you would kindly give me a reference letter.(你的)

Thanks for your kind attention and I will be appreciated if you would kindly to give me a reference letter.(提議)

I suggest you change it to:

Thank you for your kind attention and I will appreciate if you would (or change would to could) kindly give me a reference letter.

basically correct ga~~ give you 2 more examples ar~~

Thank you for your kind attention and I will be much grateful if you would kindly give me a reference letter.

or

Thank you for your kind attention and it would be much appreciated if you would kindly give me a reference letter.

Thank you for your kind attention and I will be appreciated if you would kindly give me a reference letter.
谢谢您亲切的关注，并且我被赞赏您是否亲切地会给我参考信件。
Thanks your kind attention, and I am appreciated you whether can give me kindly to refer to the letter.

I would change this sentence to "Thank you for your attention and would be higher appreciated the reference letter."

沒有錯 沒有錯 沒有錯 沒有錯 沒有錯