幫我改錯字!!pls!!!等住救命!!!(ENGLISH)

我的英文也不太好, 希望你用得著吧!

My unforgettable experience that was the frist time I travalled to Beijing with my teachers and schoolmates. I was so excited on the flight. When we arrived Beijing,we went to the local restaurant to taste some Beijing's traditional food. It was so tasty. Then, we started to tour lots of places. I found that "The Imperial Palace" is really an impressive building. It is about seven hundred thousand square metres. It is so grand. At night, we were playing cards and chatting in our bedroom. I was glad about this trip.(連解釋)唔該!!
我最難忘的經歷就是我第一次喝老師及同學到北京. 在飛航中我感到很興奮.當我們到達北京, 我們去了當地的餐廳品嚐傳統食物. 真是很美味!然後, 我們開始觀光很多地方, 我發現故宮確實是最令人有深刻印象的建築物. 它約7000000平方公尺. 真是宏偉! 晚上我們就在房間玩啤牌及傾計. 這次旅程,我真高興!

My most unforgettable experience
(or One of my unforgettable experiences)
(If you just say "My unforgettable experience", it may mean that you have only one unforgettable experience.)

was the first time I travelled
(spelling mistakes)
(The verb "travelled" should be preceded by the subject that travelled -- do you think if "My first time" can travel?)

to Beijing. I went to Beijing
(in this case, "go" is an intransitive verb. It needs the preposition "to")

with my teachers and schoolmates. I was excited about flying
(excited able verb+ing)

on the plane. When we arrived at
(The preposition should be "at".)

Beijing, we went to a local restaurant
(You've never mentioned the restaurant before and there should be many restaurant in Beijing, right? So you need an indefinite article)

to eat some Beijing's dishes.
(Infinitive! Use "eat" not "ate". A better word choice is "have".)

They were tasty.
(The noun "Dishes" is pural, isn't it?)

We went to a lot of places but my most unforgettable place was the Imperial Palace.
(We don't capitalize some minor words (e.g. the, a, of) in proper names, except they are the first word in a sentence)

It was
(Although this sentence should be always true, we should use past tense when we are talking a past experience or story.)

about seven hundred thousand square metres. It was large.
(The same reason as above)

At night, we played card games and chatted in the hotel room.
(You shouldn't say "the room" because you haven't mentioned any room before and most readers do not understand which room you are referring to. So, you may say "in a room". But it is even better if you write "in the hotel room" because most readers will know you are referring to "the particular room in which you stayed". In this case, you can use the definite article "the".)

I was glad of
(We should use "glad of".)

the trip.

文法加錯字已更改!!
My unforgettable experience was my first time traveled to Beijing. I went Beijing with my teachers and schoolmates. I was excited about flew on the plane. When we arrived to Beijing, we went to the local restaurant to eat some Beijing's dishes. It was tasty. We went to a lot of places but my most unforgettable place was The Imperial Palace. It is about seven hundred thousand square meters’ is large. At night, we played card games and chatted in the room. I was glad about the trip .

我令人難忘的經驗是我首次被移動到北京。 我去北京與我的老師和同學。 我在飛機上覺得好緊張。 當我們到達了到北京， 我們去地方餐館吃某一北京的盤。 它鮮美。我們去很多地方，但我的最令人難忘的地方是皇家宮殿。 它是大約七十萬平方米,很大。 在晚上， 我們在屋子裡演奏了打牌并且聊天。 我在這是次旅行十分高興.

2007-03-11 18:15:37 補充：
x 被移動應該是" 旅遊到北京"

有兩個錯字

... frist ... travalled ...(第一句)

frist 轉做first
travalled轉做travelled

解釋
我最難忘的經驗是到北京的我的第一的時間。我、我的老師和同窗去了北京。我在飛機上對飛感到興奮。當我們到達了到北京的時候，我們去當地的餐廳吃了一些北京的菜。它是好吃的。我們去許多地方了，但是我最忘不了的地方是帝王的王宮。它是大約七十萬平方公尺。它是大的。 在晚上，我們在房間中玩了紙牌遊戲而且閒談了。我很高興關於旅行的事。

我令人難忘的經驗是我的frist時間travalled到北京。
我去北京與我的老師和同學。我在飛機上被激發飛行。
當我們到達了到北京，我們去地方餐館對吃了某一北京的盤。它鮮美。