My hobbies尼篇文有冇錯

My hobbies are make models and playing computer games.I make models every week.I like marking models because it is so interesting and is not boring.So I have many models at home.But the models are so expensive.Making models is good for children so I make models every week.

I play computer games every day.I like playing computer games because it is exciting and fun.I like playing exciting games in my computer.But playing computer games is not good for children.So I like making models more than playing computer games.

第一篇文的改寫
My hobbies are building models and playing computer games.I build models every week.I like marking models because it is so interesting. So I have many models at home.But the model is so expensive.Making models is good for children so I make models every week.

第二篇文的改寫
I play computer games every day.I like playing computer games because it is exciting and fun.I like playing exciting games in computer.But playing computer games is not good for children.I like building models more than play computer games.

討論:
筆者似乎是初學英文, 故此用字也比較少, 句字結構也比較簡單, 原文本來可以用更好的句子和連接詞去改寫。但學英文是一步一步的去學, 所以現階段我也只是改錯, 沒有改用更好句子的結構。

2. I like building models more than play computer games. 可用更好的
I'd prefer building models rather than play computer games.

3. 原文作者要留意, play computer是動詞, 你想寫玩電腦這個嗜好, 是一個名詞(一個東西), 要加ing, 變成playing computer, 英文叫這做gerund, 但你暫時就別理會他叫甚麼, 記著這個語法好了 e.g.
I like swimming 我喜愛游泳這個活動, swimming在當成是一個名詞就好像 I like banana 一樣

希望你明白我的解說

2007-03-11 17:55:35 補充：
我要修正.I like building models more than play computer games. 應寫為.I like building models more than playing computer games. 我愛砌模型這個活動多於玩電腦這個活動討論點2, 也應為I would prefer building models rather than playing computer gamesSORRY