有冇錯呀!!!please!!

Then Will told us his story about how his father had sold him to Mr. Fry. Will believed that every father in the world is similar to his father. I was shocked because it is my belief that everyone has parents to care for them even though they are poor, but Will has nothing of this kind.

2007-03-10 18:25:52 補充：
以下是按原文作出基本的修改﹕Then Will told us about his story and how his father had sold him to Mr. Fry. Will believed that all fathers in the world are the same. This made me startled because I thought that even the poor children have parents to take care of them; but Will had nothing.

2007-03-10 18:29:47 補充：
註﹕上文believed that ... thought that ...緊接着的that clause 採用現在式來分別突出Will及作者所相信、所認為的 " 事物 " 好作對比。

Then Will told us about his story and how his father had sold him to Mr. Fry. Will believed that every father in the world [are] [all] the same. This [---] made me startled because I [thought] [---] everyone was poor [---], but [at least] they [have] their parents to care [of] them; [However], Will had [nothing].

[ ]裏面是我改咗/加咗的字，[---]是删去了原先的字。